Comments on: Hanging on the telephone – flash fiction

By: John

John — Sun, 26 May 2013 07:03:15 +0000

Many thanks to all my commentators. I’ve been unavoidably absent from my computer for a couple of days, so this is a blanket thanks to AnElephantCant, Randy Maize, Björn Rudberg, Joe Owens, Neens, David Stewart, Emma, Perry Block, petrujviljoen and Shirley McCann. Your comments are much appreciated!

By: Shirley McCann

Shirley McCann — Sat, 25 May 2013 12:46:09 +0000

Lots going on here. Really enjoyed this one.

By: petrujviljoen

petrujviljoen — Sat, 25 May 2013 07:41:24 +0000

Many aspects, the guy’s mother phoning the cops, the protrectress and the menacing female stalker inflicting harm. Well written. Insightful.

By: Perry Block

Perry Block — Sat, 25 May 2013 02:15:59 +0000

Really like the illustration and the sense of sheer desperation conveyed. Well done.

By: Emma

Emma — Fri, 24 May 2013 15:13:12 +0000

Your illustration is great. This is so frantic I want to know so much more about the character.

When I don’t hear your voice things go… wrong.

Brilliant!

By: David Stewart

David Stewart — Fri, 24 May 2013 15:05:40 +0000

Interesting. I’m not sure whether to dismiss the caller as a crazy stalker or feel bad for her. Nice dialogue.

By: Neens

Neens — Fri, 24 May 2013 11:40:54 +0000

Great character.

By: Joe Owens

Joe Owens — Fri, 24 May 2013 10:53:02 +0000

I loved Blondie, although only a couple of her songs caught my attention. You picked a fabulous muse to center on!

By: Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

Björn Rudberg (brudberg) — Fri, 24 May 2013 09:23:04 +0000

Great – that type of callers sounds eerie.. and a police at the end. Great illustration.

By: Randy Mazie

Randy Mazie — Thu, 23 May 2013 11:48:35 +0000

great story… great illustration Randy